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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
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table illustrates how many
employees
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 and
factories
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were
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there were
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 in both UK regions (England and Wales) between 1851 and 1901.
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, even though the
number
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 of male
employees
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 outnumbered females, the total
number
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 of both genders decreased and became equal by the end of the period.
It is clear that
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 the
number
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 of
factories
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 demonstrated a significant rise. Looking at the details, in 1851, the
number
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 of male and female
employees
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 started at 287,100
people
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 and 190,000
people
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 respectively,
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 the former decreased almost halved to 131,780
people
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,
while
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 the latter declined only by 30,000
people
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.
However
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, in 1901 these figures showed a significant drop to a similar
number
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 of
employees
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 around
30,000people
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30,000 people
. The total
number
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 of
employees
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 demonstrated a decline throughout
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the
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 period, from 477,100
people
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 in 1851 to 61,000
people
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 in 1901.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
factories
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 started at 225 in 1851, which continued to rise until 1881 to 721
factories
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 . In the years 1891 and 1901, the figure demonstrated a decrease to 600
factories
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, factories, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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