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Communication technology has become so prevalent nowadays. What are the causes of this popularity? Is it a positive or negative development?

#communication #technology #popularity #development
In the past few years, the world has witnessed the radical impact of
communication
technology
 and the way
people
 interact with one
other
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.
This
 rapid alteration can be explained by numerous factors which feed it in the first place and cause both positive and negative effects which will be discussed in
this
 essay. Many parts
in
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 our modern society are the driving forces behind the exponential growth of
communication
technology
. To be particular, in
such
 a busy world like nowadays when demand for a fast way to have interactions with each other is at an
all
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time
 high, social media
such
 as Facebook and Twitter are the complete answer to
such
problem
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. Another reason that explains the impact of
technology
in
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communication
 is its convenience. Without a doubt,
such
 inventions have made
people
’s lives easier, as there is little to no reason why they should interact with
people
 in person when they could just sit in their
home
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 and have a
real
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time
 video call
..
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Communication
technology
 gives us both benefits and consequences. On the one hand, having conversations in an instant helps
people
 to communicate with anyone they love at any
time
, as long as an internet connection is available. Social media
also
 allows individuals to make new friends online and interact with them as if they have met in real life.
However
,
on the other hand
,
people
 can be easily addicted to it and quickly lose their focus if they spend too much
time
being
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online.
Communication
technology
 is
also
 capable of distancing
people
 from one
other
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, leaving them with negative thoughts and feelings,
for
example
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 loneliness or depression. All in all the growth of
communication
technology
 all comes down from the demand from the society of wanting to have more convenient interactions. It is
also
 important to note that
although
 the positive impact that
communication
technology
 makes is undeniable,
people
 should have more responsibility in using it or they will face
with
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the appalling effects that
such
technology
 can give
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task response
The essay addresses the topic but lacks depth and coherence in presenting ideas. There is a need for clearer and more comprehensive development of ideas and examples related to the causes of popularity of communication technology and its positive/negative development.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure is somewhat coherent, but there is a lack of clear introduction and conclusion. The essay needs better organization to enhance the overall coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary, but there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice. It would benefit from utilizing a wider variety of vocabulary and expressions to enhance lexical resource.
grammatical range
There are various grammatical errors throughout the essay, including verb tense inconsistencies, subject-verb agreement, and awkward sentence structures. A more sophisticated and accurate use of grammar is needed to improve the grammatical range.

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