with the pressures on today's young people to Succeed academically. Some people believe that non-academic subjects at school eg. physical education and cookery should be removed from the syllabus so that chicken can concentrate wholly on acadesoic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Indeed their are
alot
Correct your spelling
lot
of pressure on
todays
Change to a genitive case
today's
show examples
youth
interms
Correct your spelling
in terms
of their
academic
Fix the agreement mistake
academics
show examples
so there are some concerns by students that schools
muct
Correct your spelling
must
provide more
focous
Correct your spelling
focus
on majors rather than
non academic
Add a hyphen
non-academic
show examples
programs
such
Linking Words
as physical education and so on.
According to
Linking Words
me
Add a comma
me,
show examples
both academic and
non academic
Add a hyphen
non-academic
show examples
sujects
Correct your spelling
subjects
are playing
Wrong verb form
play
show examples
a
crutial
Correct your spelling
crucial
critical
role in studies. First and
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
formost
Correct your spelling
foremost
reason as
a merits
Correct the article-noun agreement
merit
show examples
, students are able to get a better future scope for
an
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
example, many MNC companies only hire
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
show examples
have
batter
Correct your spelling
better
show examples
skills to
tackels
Correct your spelling
tackle
tackles
with the problems and they are looking for the ethics which is only
teach
Wrong verb form
taught
show examples
in major studies.
Secondly
Linking Words
, with the help of academic
studies
Add a comma
studies,
show examples
they are boosting their mental skills. To explain more, subjects
such
Linking Words
as physics, mathematics and chemistry
helps
Correct subject-verb agreement
help
show examples
them
to
Verb problem
apply
show examples
determine the pros and cons of
Correct your spelling
their
thier
Correct your spelling
their
actions
Submitted by guptaprivateltd on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response, coherence and cohesion, grammatical range
Ensure that the introduction presents a clear and concise thesis statement. Organize your ideas into paragraphs to improve coherence and cohesion, and make sure to support your main points with specific examples. Additionally, use appropriate punctuation and sentence structures to enhance grammatical range.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the conclusion restates the thesis and summarizes the main points. Use linking words and cohesive devices to create logical connections between ideas to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary, including academic and subject-specific terms, and pay attention to word choice and collocations to improve lexical resource.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: