The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014.
The presented diagrams provide the results of a survey carried out to determine the proportion of overweight
boys
and Use synonyms
girls
aged 12 to 19 in the United States in a decade.
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Overall
, what stands out in Linking Words
both
charts is that the percentage of obesity varied dramatically in 2014 among all the criteria.
As can be seen, in 2004 Use synonyms
both
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girls
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boys
, experienced a lower level of fatness compared to the same category in 2014. Use synonyms
For instance
, in the Linking Words
boys
' chart, Hispanics were the fattest group with 13%, Use synonyms
while
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non-Hispanic
whites were placed in second with 12%. Respectively, Use synonyms
non-Hispanic
blacks were in third Use synonyms
place
by 11%. Use synonyms
By comparison
, in the Linking Words
girls
' graph, Use synonyms
non-Hispanic
blacks served the first Use synonyms
place
with 16%. Use synonyms
Similarly
, Hispanics were in second Linking Words
place
with 12%. Use synonyms
However
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non-Hispanic
whites had the lowest percentage around 9%.
In 2014, Use synonyms
both
groups reached a higher number compared to previous ones. Use synonyms
For example
, same as before, Hispanics led the first Linking Words
place
with 27% by Use synonyms
boys
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however
, Linking Words
girls
in the same sector had the 17% percentage. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
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girls
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non-Hispanic
blacks had the highest number which is 29% and Use synonyms
boys
were lower than them with 20%. Use synonyms
Lastly
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non-Hispanic
whites had the lowest number among Use synonyms
both
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girls
and Use synonyms
boys
with 14% and 17% respectively.Use synonyms
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