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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have a travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter: 1)describe the lost item. 2)Explain how you lost it 3)Tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to tell u that I have bought travel insurance from your company.
Last
 week,my family and I went to Taipei for a summer vacation.We having a great day
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 Taipei.Unfortunately,when we were going back to the hotel, I found out that my iPhone 15promax was lost ,I think I lost it on the train when we were going to Hualien. It is very sad for me
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because
this
 is my birthday present from my husband. Luckily,I found out that travel insurance has one policy that people can claim the cost of anything lost when travelling.So here is my report from Taipei's police station to prove that I lost my iPhone15promax and my insurance number is 000123457.
This
 is my phone number 0901101421 and my email address is [email protected] you very much in any case,and looking forward to hearing back from you soon. Yours sincerely, JIA HUI
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coherence cohesion
Address the insurance company in a more formal and respectful manner, using 'Dear Sir or Madam' to open the letter.
task achievement
Provide a clear and concise description of the lost item, including its details and value.
coherence cohesion
Organize the content into paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more varied sentence structures, to improve the lexical resource.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to produce a more accurate and varied range of language.
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