The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph depicts changes in the birth
rates of
China and the
USA by 80 Change preposition
in
years
.
Overall
, a glimpse of the figure provides some striking similarities between these 2 countries’ birth
rates. There is no doubt that natality
of both countries fluctuated significantly, with lows in the 1940s and highs during the 1950s.
From 1935 to 1940, the USA witnessed a negligible decline, Correct article usage
the natality
then
more sharply in the next 5 years
to hit its lowest point, at 5% in 1945. After that, in 5 years
, the birth
rate
showed a quick climb from 5% to the peak, at
10%. The fertility Change preposition
of
rate
underwent a gradual decrease to 6% at the end
of the observed period.
The birth
rate
in China fluctuated rapidly, becore
increased Correct your spelling
before
become
10
% Change preposition
by 10
reached
a high of 20% in 1950. The figure Correct word choice
and reached
declinded
sharply to 8% after 5 Correct your spelling
declined
years
. From 1955 to 2000, the fertility rate
saw a slowly
decrease from 8% to 2%.Change the word
slow
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