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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the diagrams give us information about the life cycle of a species of big size fish
that
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called salmon ,
overall
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it can be seen that they go
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through
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though
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through
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in
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3 stages in
their
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 whole
of
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their life first of all, salmon eggs are in the
deepth
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depth
 of
river
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the river
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 between
smol
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small
stons
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stones
stone
as well as
in to
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 reeds which come from
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upper river these eggs
staded
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stay
 in there for around 5-6 months , after that eggs
are becoming
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fry
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that their size
are
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 from 3 to 8 cm ,
then
 they
diving
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in to
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lower river they remain for 4 years ,
finally
 they grown up at
this
 stage they called
smot
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spot
 their size are about 12-15 cm ,
nexe
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next
 they jump in to open sea
moreover
 ,they
reamain
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remain
 for
approximatly
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approximately
 5
year
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, after 5
yeas
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years
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 they going to become adult
their
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they're
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 lengthy expanded to minimum 70 cm . when they become adult all of their cycle life are repeated .
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