The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the diagrams give us information about the life cycle of a species of big size fish upper river these eggs
that
called salmon , Correct pronoun usage
apply
Linking Words
overall
it can be seen that they go Rephrase
apply
Correct your spelling
through
though
Correct your spelling
through
in
3 stages in Change preposition
apply
their
whole Change the word
the
of
their life
first of all, salmon eggs are in the Change preposition
apply
deepth
of Correct your spelling
depth
river
between Add an article
the river
smol
Correct your spelling
small
stons
Correct your spelling
stones
stone
as well as
Linking Words
in to
reeds which come fromJoin the words
into
Correct article usage
the
staded
in there for around 5-6 months , after that eggsCorrect your spelling
stay
are becoming
Wrong verb form
become
fry
that their size Wrong verb form
fried
are
from 3 to 8 cm , Change the verb form
is
then
they Linking Words
diving
Change the form of the verb
dive
in to
lower river they remain for 4 years , Join the words
into
finally
they grown up at Linking Words
this
stage they calledLinking Words
smot
their size are about 12-15 cm ,Correct your spelling
spot
nexe
they jump in to open sea Correct your spelling
next
moreover
,they Linking Words
reamain
forCorrect your spelling
remain
approximatly
5 Correct your spelling
approximately
year
, after 5 Change to a plural noun
years
yeas
they going to become adultCorrect your spelling
years
their
lengthy expanded to minimum 70 cm . when they become adult all of their cycle life are repeated .Replace the word
they're
they are
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