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As a global trade increase, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are producing in another country and have to be transported long distances. Do benefits of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

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Globalisation in
this
 year's increased and we have many thoughts regarding a wide range of
goods
 that people use in their daily life,
Nevertheless
 the biggest part of the products are manufactured in other
countries
. In my opinion, there are many
disdvantages
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disadvantages
 than positive effects,
this
 essay will argue that I feel that for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
Once
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 commonly cited
disadvantages
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 of
imports
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goods
 from other
countries
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of
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the manufacture and hand
worker
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workers
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 will
decreased
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decrease
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.
Also
, the economic trade will
experience
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 down on
a
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different sectors,
such
 as electronics creation, clothes
producing
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production
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 etc.
For example
, The Middle East
export
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exports
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lot
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 of
goods
 differently,
that
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and
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experience
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experiences
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 a shortage on the hand workers and
the
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aptitudes. Despite
this
, there
a
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number of significant benefits, The
countries
who
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transport
goods
on
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at
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 an extensive distance, it
actives
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activates
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 the sectors of
transportasion
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transportation
 and the relationship among the
countries
, Many
economicals benifits
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economic benefits
 will be added
such
the
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 communication sector
,
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and, education
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education
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the education
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 system.
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,
china
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china's
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transfer
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transferring
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 items to the world
it
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has
a wide benefits
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wide benefits
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 on
global
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the global
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 market and
their
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the
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 new generation
have
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has
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a
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one path that follow
such
 as creativity,
productivity
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and productivity
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 divided
on a differ
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into different
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 categories.
To conclude
,
although
 there are drawbacks, producing
goods
on
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in
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 other
countries
 and
imports
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importing
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 items will experience a shortage
on
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in
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a
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different categories for the acceptable country.
Furthermore
, it is clearly seen that the benefits of
that is
 the relationship between The International market will open many facilities and
boundries
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boundaries
 and
the
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global trade will prosper.
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