As a global trade increase, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are producing in another country and have to be transported long distances. Do benefits of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

Globalisation in
this
year's increased and we have many thoughts regarding a wide range of
goods
that people use in their daily life,
Nevertheless
the biggest part of the products are manufactured in other
countries
. In my opinion, there are many
disdvantages
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disadvantages
than positive effects,
this
essay will argue that I feel that for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
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disadvantages
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of
imports
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goods
from other
countries
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of
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the manufacture and hand
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will
decreased
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.
Also
, the economic trade will
experience
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down on
a
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different sectors,
such
as electronics creation, clothes
producing
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etc.
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, The Middle East
export
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exports
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lot
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of
goods
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experience
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experiences
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a shortage on the hand workers and
the
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aptitudes. Despite
this
, there
a
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number of significant benefits, The
countries
who
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transport
goods
on
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an extensive distance, it
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the sectors of
transportasion
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transportation
and the relationship among the
countries
, Many
economicals benifits
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economic benefits
will be added
such
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communication sector
,
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and, education
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education
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system.
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,
china
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transfer
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items to the world
it
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has
a wide benefits
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on
global
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market and
their
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new generation
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a
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one path that follow
such
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productivity
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divided
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categories.
To conclude
,
although
there are drawbacks, producing
goods
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other
countries
and
imports
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items will experience a shortage
on
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a
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different categories for the acceptable country.
Furthermore
, it is clearly seen that the benefits of
that is
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boundaries
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the
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global trade will prosper.
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