Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

Many
people
go
througth
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through
life
doing
work
that they hate or have no
talent
for their
work
because they do not have experience for
life
when they are starting to
work
. First of all, they just want to follow someone like friends or family members to get
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easy
Job
. And, one of the
importaint
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is
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the result
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of
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in their school.
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culture
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of VietNam, when we go to school with a lot of things to learn by
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way of memory without the
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we have to understand and make
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right
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decision
so we only follow teachers who want to teach what they want us to know.
That is
a reason why
people
often do not know what they want
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which is
the
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talent
.
Secondly
, their family culture
aslo
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also
impacts
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their thinking too much and
make
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someone do something like a robot. They do not have any ideals for their
life
or
job
so they can not find the
talent
or
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favourite
what they want to do and
then
, they choose a
job
or do something wrong which they want. For
this
situation, It will make
people
lose a lot of
time
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their careers.
This
is a bad
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of
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us. Some
people
have to take five to ten years to find a right
job
to earn much more money to improve their
life
because they go around with other
people
to
work
something wrong with their
talent
.
Finally
, I think we need to invest
time
to communicate with much more
people
who can give us a recommendation before starting to join any company.
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that, we
also
read more books and join many
activites
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activities
with many
people
to find
your
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favorist
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favourite
or
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talent
to save
your
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time
. Because
,
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the
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time
is money.
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  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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