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The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following bar charts
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shows
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 in 5 different
countries
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 the
pourcentage
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percentage
 of
oil
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ressources
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resources
. We can
firstly
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 see the total
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ressources
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resources
 and the the total
oil
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 consumption per year. To start,
it is clear that
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 the Middle
east
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oil
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 the high
pourcentage
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percentage
 in
term
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terms
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 of
oil
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ressources
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resources
 and
then
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,
Asia
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 and
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the united
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united
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United
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 States are the
countries
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 with more
oil
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 consumption.
Next,
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if we focus on the detail we can see that
Middle
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 East have around
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56, 52% of
oil
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ressources
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resources
 but the
in
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 the other hand we have for
exemple
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example
 United States or
Asia
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 with just 1,85% for the first one and 2,89% for
Asia
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.
Then
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, these are other
countries
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 like Canada
who
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 provide 19,89% of
oil
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ressources
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resources
 but it is a
litle
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little
 part in
comparation
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comparison
 with
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
who
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which
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provide
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provides
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 more than
the
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half of the total
word
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world
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oil
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 ressouces.
Lastly
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, in terms of consumption, we can see how the
countries
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 with less
oil
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ressources
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resources
 are
then
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 the higher consumers like
Asia
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 or
United
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the United
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 States.
WE
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We
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 have the same example with Westen Europe
who
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 has just 1,47% of
oil
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resource
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resources
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 but
then
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 they are the United country with the high annual
oil
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consuption
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consumption
 with
with
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15,29%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, oil, ressources, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • resources
  • consumption
  • annually
  • regions
  • disparity
  • consumption rates
  • high/low resources
  • global market dynamics
  • geopolitical relations
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