The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas.

Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following bar charts
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shows
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in 5 different
countries
the
pourcentage
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percentage
of
oil
ressources
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resources
. We can
firstly
see the total
ressources
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resources
and the the total
oil
consumption per year. To start,
it is clear that
the Middle
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oil
the high
pourcentage
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percentage
in
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terms
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of
oil
ressources
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resources
and
then
,
Asia
and
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the united
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united
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United
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States are the
countries
with more
oil
consumption.
Next,
if we focus on the detail we can see that
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East have around
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56, 52% of
oil
ressources
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resources
but the
in
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the other hand we have for
exemple
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example
United States or
Asia
with just 1,85% for the first one and 2,89% for
Asia
.
Then
, these are other
countries
like Canada
who
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provide 19,89% of
oil
ressources
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resources
but it is a
litle
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little
part in
comparation
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comparison
with
Middle
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the Middle
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East
who
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which
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provide
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provides
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more than
the
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half of the total
word
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world
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oil
ressouces.
Lastly
, in terms of consumption, we can see how the
countries
with less
oil
ressources
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resources
are
then
the higher consumers like
Asia
or
United
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the United
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States.
WE
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have the same example with Westen Europe
who
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has just 1,47% of
oil
resource
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resources
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but
then
they are the United country with the high annual
oil
consuption
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consumption
with
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15,29%.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, oil, ressources, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • resources
  • consumption
  • annually
  • regions
  • disparity
  • consumption rates
  • high/low resources
  • global market dynamics
  • geopolitical relations
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