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The graph depicts participation of students from five different country in three universities. Overall, the largest number, belongs to Indians who goes to University of Riverview. Meanwhile, the smallest group are Smithtown University's Indonesians.

The graph depicts participation of students from five different country in three universities. Overall, the largest number, belongs to Indians who goes to University of Riverview. Meanwhile, the smallest group are Smithtown University's Indonesians.
The graph depicts
participation
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the participation
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 of students from five different
country
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countries
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 in three universities.
Overall
Linking Words
, the largest number
,
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apply
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 belongs to Indians who
goes
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go
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 to
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University
Correct article usage
the University
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 of Riverview. Meanwhile, the smallest group are Smithtown
University
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's Indonesians. The graph depicts
participation
Correct article usage
the participation
show examples
 of students from five different
country
Change to a plural noun
countries
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 in three universities.
Overall
Linking Words
, the largest number
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 belongs to Indians who
goes
Change the verb form
go
show examples
 to
Use synonyms
University
Correct article usage
the University
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 of Riverview. Meanwhile, the smallest group are Smithtown
University
Use synonyms
's Indonesians.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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