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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problemes. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days, more and more immigrating to new countries to get a better life.It has been suggested that
language
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barriers
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problem
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 in social interactions
as well as
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 life.I partially agree with
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 to support my opinion. Generally
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 there are a wide range of reasons why
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 believe that in ability to speak
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 the primary
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suppporting
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supporting
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 is that it will be
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difficult
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 will feel lonely isolated and frustrated ,which in turn leads to
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depression
 and alcoholism. from a practical point of
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 is that it will be
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difficult
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 a job . if an immigrant can not speak in the local
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 it is highly unlikely that he will get hired.
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 it must be said there are several
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 against there
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. if
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 can speak in
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, they might be able to communicate effectively.
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 they can use an interpreter.
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,with the help
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one
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,learning
new
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language
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 is a topic which is very
relavant
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relevant
 to modern society . I partially believe that communication
varrier
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barrier
carrier
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cause
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 serious
problem
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.If a person to
move
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another country and he can not speak the
language
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 at all, life will be quite
deficult
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difficult
.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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