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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problemes. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language #problemes
These days, more and more immigrating to new countries to get a better life.It has been suggested that
language
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problems
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 in social interactions
as well as
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issues
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 life.I partially agree with
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idea
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 will give some
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 to support my opinion. Generally
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 there are a wide range of reasons why
people
 believe that in ability to speak
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language
 can
cause
 serious problems .From a social point of
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 the primary
argument
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supporting
this
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 is that it will be
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difficult
 to make
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.
As a result
 ,
people
 will feel lonely isolated and frustrated ,which in turn leads to
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depression
 and alcoholism. from a practical point of
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 another key
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support
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this
idea
 is that it will be
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difficult
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 a job . if an immigrant can not speak in the local
language
 it is highly unlikely that he will get hired.
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 it must be said there are several
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 against there
idea
 that four
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cause
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problems
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 perhaps the strongest of
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 is that
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 is auniversal
language
. if
people
 can speak in
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, they might be able to communicate effectively.
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 they can use an interpreter.
last
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,with the help
from
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 local
people
any
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one
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anyone
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 can
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this
 local
language
 . In
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,learning
new
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language
 is a topic which is very
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relevant
 to modern society . I partially believe that communication
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barrier
carrier
 can
cause
 serious
problem
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.If a person to
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another country and he can not speak the
language
 at all, life will be quite
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difficult
.
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