Disadvantages about using the internet as main source of news.

Due to
the wide accessibility of the internet, many people write and publish everything they think without reliable sources. There is a lot of false information,
in addition
to problems with security and privacy in the virtual environment. It is impossible to manage the amount of information with which we are bombarded daily and given all
this
information technology, it is necessary to have clarity to be able to filter real data from false ones, knowing how to choose those that are truly reliable. Especially when it comes to children and teenagers, who are frequent consumers of internet content.
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The introduction and conclusion could be more developed to provide a clearer framework for the essay
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is well-connected to the next, with clear and logical progression of ideas
lexical resource
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grammatical range
Work on sentence structure and grammar to avoid repetition and improve overall fluency

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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