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The two graphs show the main energy sources in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

The two graphs show the main energy sources in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.
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The pie charts display the primary
power
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 sources in the United States between 1980 and 1990.
Overall
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,
oil
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,
gas
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 and coal were the vast majority of the main
energy
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 sources in the USA throughout the period.
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 the usage of
oil
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 and natural
gas
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 decreased over time, nuclear
power
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 and coal increased their value significantly. In 1980,
oil
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used
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 as the main
energy
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 source in the USA with 42%, demonstrating the most significant
energy
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 alternatives compared to others. Natural
gas
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 and coal
used
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 by just above a quarter and almost a quarter respectively. Both hydroelectric and nuclear
power
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 were only used by 5% as the main
energy
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 source in
United
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 States. After a decade,
oil
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protecting
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 its leadership with a small drop of 9%. The proportion of natural
gas
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 decreased slightly by 1%;
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, the proportion of coal increased by 5% and replaced natural
gas
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 as the second biggest
energy
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 source in the USA in 1990.
While
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hydroelectic
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hydroelectric
power
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 stayed at the same level
of
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 1980, the percentage of nuclear
power
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 doubled by 1990.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, oil, gas, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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