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Completing university education is thought by some to b ethe best way to get a job.On th eotehr hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Disscuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is commonly believed that having a degree is the most adequate option in terms of professional wealth.
However
, others think that experience is the clue
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 success. I believe that going to university does make a difference in one’s development,
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 the acquisition of soft skills is undervalued. On the one hand, many people believe that in order to become a prestigious professional you must complete a series of courses in relation to the matter. The lack of educational experience is normally penalized with failure in your professional life.
In other words
, if someone wants to be conceived as a profitable worker, having attended
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university will always be a favourable factor.
Also
, the fact that someone dedicates a considerate number of years completely to the study of a specific issue, does lead to a fully formed person and an expert on a field.
On the other hand
, being experienced does have uncountable advantages.
Firstly
, labourers
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 have been focused on the acquisition of more practical qualities, rather than on theoretical aspects, are already one step ahead
intellectuals
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.
For instance
, those that have obtained practical skills do know how to deal with situations in a
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 scenario.
This
 means that they are learning through reality.
Secondly
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normally tend to be hard workers. They acquire knowledge only by the repetitions of their actions and learning from their mistakes.
Following
this
 scheme, they find a logical side to all processes. In my opinion, the mentioned development of soft skills is rather important in the construction of your future.
To sum up
,
although
 services offered by educational institutions should not be left aside, the learning acquired from real experience is even more significant in a person’s long journey to find a job.
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