People think that goverments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve envinronmental problems. Give your opinion
The
most
problem of our circumstances Correct word choice
biggest
caused
by Add a missing verb
is caused
pollutant
from cars and other vehicles. Many Fix the agreement mistake
pollutants
people
believe that the best solution for the problem is Fix the infinitive
to rise
rise
the Correct your spelling
raise
price
of petrol. I agree that increasing the cost of fuel
will impact to reduce greenhouse gas emissions and air pollutions
, Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
however
that policy can Add a comma
however,
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
for
Change preposition
apply
lower income
Add a hyphen
lower-income
people
in a country.
The government needs
emphasize that important to provide Add the particle
needs to
Add an article
a health
health
environment for society. Higher Replace the word
healthy
fuel
price
can encourage Fix the agreement mistake
prices
people
to choose other option
for Fix the agreement mistake
options
transportation
including public transportation
or mass transportation
Such
as Massive Rapid Transport (MRT), Train
, Integration Bus or Fix the agreement mistake
Trains
the
others. Correct article usage
apply
In
Change preposition
As
the
result, Correct article usage
a
People
will abandoned to use
private Wrong verb form
abandon using
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
and
impact Correct word choice
apply
to
Change preposition
in
significant
decrease Add an article
a significant
the significant
of
Change preposition
in
the
gas emissions and air Correct article usage
apply
pollutions
.
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
On the other hand
, Decide
to rise of the Verb problem
apply
fuel
price
by the government that
make the lower-income Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
trapped in poor condition. The statistics proved a evidence
that the cost of energy Remove the article
evidence
a piece of evidence
a shred of evidence
climb
Wrong verb form
climbed
following
by Wrong verb form
followed
increase
Correct article usage
an increase
of
Change preposition
in
the
consumer Correct article usage
apply
good
cost. The Fix the agreement mistake
goods
price
of consumers
goods Change the noun form
consumer
Add a missing verb
is effected
effected
by Correct your spelling
affected
the
Correct article usage
apply
transportation
due to
part of a supply chain. As a consequences
, Correct the article-noun agreement
consequence
people
with lower-income
will Correct your spelling
lower incomes
losing
Change the verb form
lose
be losing
the
purchasing power. Change the word
their
For example
, In normal condition
a family the average Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
of
outcome in a month is $100 but with a new policy that Change preposition
apply
not
enough for a month.
Add a missing verb
is not
To conclude
, Increasing of
Change preposition
apply
fuel
price
can impact to encourage Fix the agreement mistake
prices
people
abandon
Add the particle
to abandon
the
personal car Change the word
their
to
Change preposition
for
the
public Correct article usage
apply
transportation
, perhaps will reduce air pollutants and gas emissions. But
the higher gasoline Correct word choice
However
price
will increase the purchasing power of lower-income people
in a country.Submitted by syah.lian.ju on
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