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Band 4

People think that goverments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve envinronmental problems. Give your opinion

#people #goverments #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
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most
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 problem of our circumstances
caused
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is caused
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 by
pollutant
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pollutants
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 from cars and other vehicles. Many
people
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 believe that the best solution for the problem is
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to rise
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rise
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raise
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 the
price
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 of petrol. I agree that increasing the cost of
fuel
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 will impact to reduce greenhouse gas emissions and air
pollutions
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pollution
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,
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however
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however,
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 that policy can
effect
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affect
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for
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apply
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lower income
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lower-income
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people
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 in a country. The government
needs
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needs to
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 emphasize that important to provide
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a health
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health
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 environment for society. Higher
fuel
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price
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prices
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 can encourage
people
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 to choose other
option
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options
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 for
transportation
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 including public
transportation
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 or mass
transportation
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 as Massive Rapid Transport (MRT),
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, Integration Bus or
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others.
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the
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 result,
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 will
abandoned to use
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abandon using
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 private
car
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cars
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and
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apply
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impact
to
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significant
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a significant
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 decrease
of
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the
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apply
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gas emissions and air
pollutions
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pollution
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.
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,
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to rise of the
fuel
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price
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 by the government
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make the lower-income
people
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 trapped in poor condition. The statistics proved
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evidence
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 that the cost of energy
climb
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following
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followed
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 by
increase
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an increase
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of
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the
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consumer
good
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goods
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 cost. The
price
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 of
consumers
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consumer
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 goods
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is effected
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effected
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affected
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 by
the
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apply
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transportation
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due to
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 part of a supply chain. As a
consequences
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consequence
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,
people
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 with
lower-income
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lower incomes
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 will
losing
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lose
be losing
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the
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their
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 purchasing power.
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, In normal
condition
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conditions
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 a family the average
of
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outcome in a month is $100 but with a new policy that
not
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is not
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 enough for a month.
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, Increasing
of
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fuel
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price
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prices
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 can impact to encourage
people
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abandon
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to abandon
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the
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their
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 personal car
to
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for
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the
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apply
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public
transportation
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, perhaps will reduce air pollutants and gas emissions.
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 the higher gasoline
price
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 will increase the purchasing power of lower-income
people
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 in a country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • increase the cost of fuel
  • reduce greenhouse gas emissions
  • air pollution
  • public transportation
  • carpool
  • fuel-efficient vehicles
  • sustainable transportation infrastructure
  • affordability of transportation
  • low incomes
  • governments should strike a balance
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