People think that goverments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve envinronmental problems. Give your opinion

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most
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problem of our circumstances
caused
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is caused
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by
pollutant
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pollutants
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from cars and other vehicles. Many
people
believe that the best solution for the problem is
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to rise
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rise
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raise
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the
price
of petrol. I agree that increasing the cost of
fuel
will impact to reduce greenhouse gas emissions and air
pollutions
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pollution
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,
however
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however,
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that policy can
effect
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affect
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for
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lower income
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lower-income
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people
in a country. The government
needs
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emphasize that important to provide
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a health
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health
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environment for society. Higher
fuel
price
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prices
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can encourage
people
to choose other
option
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options
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for
transportation
including public
transportation
or mass
transportation
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as Massive Rapid Transport (MRT),
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, Integration Bus or
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others.
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the
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result,
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will
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private
car
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cars
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and
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impact
to
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significant
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a significant
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decrease
of
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in
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the
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apply
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gas emissions and air
pollutions
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pollution
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.
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,
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to rise of the
fuel
price
by the government
that
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make the lower-income
people
trapped in poor condition. The statistics proved
a evidence
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evidence
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that the cost of energy
climb
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following
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followed
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by
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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the
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consumer
good
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goods
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cost. The
price
of
consumers
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goods
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is effected
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effected
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affected
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by
the
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transportation
due to
part of a supply chain. As a
consequences
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consequence
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,
people
with
lower-income
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lower incomes
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will
losing
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lose
be losing
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the
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their
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purchasing power.
For example
, In normal
condition
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conditions
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a family the average
of
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apply
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outcome in a month is $100 but with a new policy that
not
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is not
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enough for a month.
To conclude
, Increasing
of
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fuel
price
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prices
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can impact to encourage
people
abandon
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to abandon
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the
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their
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personal car
to
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for
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the
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public
transportation
, perhaps will reduce air pollutants and gas emissions.
But
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the higher gasoline
price
will increase the purchasing power of lower-income
people
in a country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • increase the cost of fuel
  • reduce greenhouse gas emissions
  • air pollution
  • public transportation
  • carpool
  • fuel-efficient vehicles
  • sustainable transportation infrastructure
  • affordability of transportation
  • low incomes
  • governments should strike a balance
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