The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given pie charts

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some information regarding the prime reasons why agricultural

land

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becomes less fruitful.

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highest percentage of causes of worldwide

land

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degradation is related to

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accounting for %35 of the whole pie chart. Deforestation and over-cultivation account for %58 collectively

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their sum is almost slightly above half of the pie chart. A minority of causes (%7) is related to other worldwide

land

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degradation. The given table has been divided

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four columns each of which represents some information regarding the causes of

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degradation by three

region

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including North America, Europe and Oceania (

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a large group of islands in the South Pacific including

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Australia

and Newzealand).The data given

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the way these principles affected three regions of the world during

1990s

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the 1990s

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. A glance at the table provided reveals that Europe has the highest amount and ratio among most of the four specified groups,

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as deforestation,

over cultivation

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and Total

land

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degreed.

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, North America has the lowest values among these three groups.

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the highest conscription of over-grazing

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oceania

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Oceania

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, there is no value for Oceania in

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over-cultivation

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. The percentage values of all four groups in North America are almost in the same range between 0.2% and %5.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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6 paragraphs

213 words

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