The chart below show the roth in the population in some of the world's largest cities as well as the population distrubation in urban and rural areas.
Given is a graph indicating some information regarding the
develop
in the community in some of the world’s huge cities Replace the word
development
as well as
the population
giving out in built-up and countryside area
including Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Tokyo
, New York
, Shanghai, Bambara, and Jakarta over a period of sixteen years. The growth in the population
is measured in million
(Fix the agreement mistake
millions
M
).
Overall
, the population
number of all five communities increased, albeit to a widely varying degree, Tokyo
witnessed a higher rise during 2010. New York
experienced a
least rise during a given period.
Change the article
the
According to
the bar graph, Tokyo
Change noun form
Tokyo's
population
increased from 17 (M
) to 24 (M
) between 1970 and 1990 and the population
in Tokyo
increased to 27.6 (M
) in 2010. New York
increased from 12.5 to 26.6 (M
) between 1950 to 2010. Shanghai
Change noun form
Shanghai's
population
witnessed an increase from 22.9 (M
).
Although
Bombay didn’t show that much increase during 1970 and 1990 but
increasing from 22 in 1990 to 26.6 in 2010, Correct word choice
apply
Bombay
community witnessed an increase from 4.6 (Correct article usage
the Bombay
M
) until 2010. The population
growth in Bombay and Jakarta, almost 5.5 times, was higher than any other city listed.
The table data shows that in 1950 the most polluted city in the world was New York
with 12.5 (M
) residents. London is in 2nd grade with 7.9 (M
) residents and Tokyo
is in third grade with 6.5(M
).The figure for Paris and Moscow remained fairly stable during 1950
period.
Correct article usage
the 1950
At
the end, over than 3 billion people lived in Change the preposition
In
a
rural Correct article usage
apply
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
during
1980 to 1990 Change preposition
from
while
less than 2 billion people lived in urban area
. But between 2000 to 2010 Fix the agreement mistake
areas
population
of people in the urban area
increased from 2.5 (B) to 4(B) and the rural population
decreased from almost 0.5 billion during
2000 to 2010.Change preposition
from
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