You are not satisfied with many problems and with the changing room in a Sports Centre that you visit. Write a letter to the Sports Centre manager. In your letter Explain the problem Say how you feel about this problem What steps you would like manager to take.

Dear Sir,Madam , I am writing
this
letter to express my frustration about
cleanliness
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and improper maintenance in the
sport
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center . I
am
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a member of the
sport
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center
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for 3 years but
last
three weeks I have observed that the
managment
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management
not
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does not
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pay attention to
cleaning
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the cleaning
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of washroom and there are many dirty
at
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in
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the washroom
also
bins
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are
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have been
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full for 3 days
also
there
are
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no
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soap to wash our hand and no paper towels to wipe our hand as I
am visit
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the
sport
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center
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every day so I have been observing
this
problem a long time
moreover
, I noticed that the facilities at changing room as light and equipment not working well. I complained to
Mr.
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Ahmed about
this
problems
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problem
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and as you see no responses from
Mr.
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Ahmed
therefore
, I would be grateful to take
quickaction
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quick action
from your side and solve
this
issue with
directors
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the directors
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. I thank you in anticipation and look forward to a positive response. Best regards,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear central idea and support for that idea.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing should be more formal and appropriate for a letter to a manager.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the letter's impact and formality.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure and use a variety of sentence types to demonstrate a higher level of grammatical range.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsanitary
  • unpleasant
  • frustrating
  • substandard
  • unacceptable
  • disappointing
  • inconvenient
  • unhygienic
  • maintenance
  • cleaning
  • facilities
  • outdated
  • repair
  • shortage
  • lockers
  • benches
  • showers
  • functioning
  • staff
  • unhelpful
  • impolite
  • privacy partitions
  • ventilation
  • smell
  • lighting
  • inspections
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