You are not satisfied with many problems and with the changing room in a Sports Centre that you visit. Write a letter to the Sports Centre manager. In your letter Explain the problem Say how you feel about this problem What steps you would like manager to take.

#room #sports #centre #visit #manager #steps

Dear Sir,Madam , I am writing

this

letter to express my frustration about

cleanliness

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the cleanliness

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and improper maintenance in the

sport

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sports

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center . I

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have been

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a member of the

sport

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sports

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center

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centre

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for 3 years but

last

three weeks I have observed that the

managment

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management

not

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does not

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pay attention to

cleaning

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the cleaning

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of washroom and there are many dirty

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the washroom

also

bins

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are

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have been

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full for 3 days

also

there

are

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not

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soap to wash our hand and no paper towels to wipe our hand as I

am visit

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the

sport

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sports

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center

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centre

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every day so I have been observing

this

problem a long time

moreover

, I noticed that the facilities at changing room as light and equipment not working well. I complained to

Mr.

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Ahmed about

this

problems

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problem

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and as you see no responses from

Mr.

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Ahmed

therefore

, I would be grateful to take

quickaction

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quick action

from your side and solve

this

issue with

directors

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the directors

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. I thank you in anticipation and look forward to a positive response. Best regards,

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coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing should be more formal and appropriate for a letter to a manager.

lexical resource

Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the letter's impact and formality.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

164 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

unsanitary
unpleasant
frustrating
substandard
unacceptable
disappointing
inconvenient
unhygienic
maintenance
cleaning
facilities
outdated
repair
shortage
lockers
benches
showers
functioning
staff
unhelpful
impolite
privacy partitions
ventilation
smell
lighting
inspections

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You are not satisfied with many problems and with the changing room in a Sports Centre that you visit. Write a letter to the Sports Centre manager. In your letter Explain the problem Say how you feel about this problem What steps you would like manager to take.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Some people consider prices as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree

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