You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Officer, I want to inform you to get rid of some drawbacks, which are related to the college's room. Please, help me or give me some useful choices. Well, my college is situated far from the market.
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some choices to get rid of these examples. But, those solutions are unbeneficial or useless. If
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am going to describe that, why working there is tough. One of the most important
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, comfortable condition. Sometimes, we can not eat, because, Taxi drivers
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our sleep, they
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attack us and our product, Unknowingly, we will consume,
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minuses. Dear Officer, The most crucial aim, Please, All facilities can be done or changed to another apartment
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the market. I wish in there, there
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no cockroaches. Mostly, in winter, all tools are amended. I would like to have Like these accomodations. I am looking forward to expecting your
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. Sincerely, your customer:Jumayeva Sarvinoz
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter follows a clear and organized structure with an appropriate greeting and closing.
task achievement
Address all aspects of the task prompt thoroughly and use an appropriate writing tone.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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