You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Dear Officer,
I want to inform you to get rid of some drawbacks, which are related to the college's room. Please, help me or give me some useful choices.
Well, my college is situated far from the market.
That is
first
problem. Change the article
the first
Secondly
, For cooking, there are not
heating things. Correct your spelling
no
Thirdly
, Cockroaches are multiplying day by day, Those damgages
not only to our health but Correct your spelling
damages
damage
also
to our clean households. Those are awkward and awful circumstances for us. We try to perform
some choices to get rid of these examples. But, those solutions are unbeneficial or useless.
If Verb problem
make
i
am going to describe that, why working there is tough. One of the most important Change the capitalization
I
reason
is not Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
efficient
, comfortable condition. Sometimes, we can not eat, because, Taxi drivers Add an article
an efficient
the efficient
wil
come here rarely. Heating things do not work well always, Sometimes, Lights Correct your spelling
will
turned
off as we expectedAdd a missing verb
are turned
more
. Correct quantifier usage
apply
Moreover
, Over being cockroaches, while
they are using of
our sleep, they Change preposition
apply
are
attack us and our product, Unknowingly, we will consume, Unnecessary verb
apply
as
a Correct word choice
and as
result
all these the given things will be Add the comma(s)
result,
come
minuses.
Dear Officer, The most crucial aim, Please, All facilities can be done or changed to another apartment Verb problem
apply
that is
near at
the market. I wish in there, there Change preposition
apply
had
no cockroaches. Mostly, in winter, all tools are amended. I would like to have Like these accomodations.
I am looking forward to expecting your Verb problem
were
respond
.
Sincerely,
your customer:Jumayeva SarvinozReplace the word
response
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter follows a clear and organized structure with an appropriate greeting and closing.
task achievement
Address all aspects of the task prompt thoroughly and use an appropriate writing tone.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite