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You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: introduce yourself explain the situation say what action you would like the company to take

#camera #home #company #representative #week #situation #action
Dear Andrew, My name is Karina and I am one of your
renter
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 in Florida Society. As you know ,the global pandemic has hit
every one
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 hard ,I am no exception in
this
 case.
i
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 am writing
this
 letter to seek your permission to pay the rent of my apartment
aftrer
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after
 2
month
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. My company has cut my basic pay by 50 per cent and
this
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 different time, I am not able to cover the basic expense of my family.As I have been your tenant since 2019 ,I
took for
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 that you will understand my situation.I guarantee that your rent is paid without missing from next month , I have
starting
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 online classes from home .I
ensure
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I
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 the future will be made to you in
this
 regard. Thanking you in anticipation.
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Your
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 faithfully, Karina.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter is well-structured with an introduction, body, and conclusion. Address the situation of the camera being faulty and the actions taken so far.
coherence cohesion
Use a suitable greeting and closing for a formal letter. Address the recipient respectfully and professionally.
coherence cohesion
Develop and support ideas more fully. Each paragraph should focus on a single central idea or topic.
task achievement
Provide a clear and detailed response to each part of the question in a formal tone. Ensure that the letter is appropriately structured and formatted as per the task.
task achievement
Use a suitable and professional closing for a formal letter. Address the recipient respectfully and professionally.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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