The pie charts below show the results of a surveys into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

The pie charts below show the results of a surveys into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.
The pie
graph
demostrated
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demonstrated
demonstrates
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the differente
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differente
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different
types of leisure
activies
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activities
was
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practiced
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by European adults in 1985 and 1995. The first
graph
shows five
type
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types
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of
activies
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activities
activity
,
although
the
second
graph
presents one more. In general, the topic "watching TV" did not change a lot with only
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%
of
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difference,
on the other hand
, "eating outside" had a decrease of 15%
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long of these years.  "Playing computer game" showed up as a new category of activity in 1995, it was not in the previous
graph
and,
in addition
, it got the
second
position with a little bit over than 25%, before the
second
position was
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by "talking with friends".
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it
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displayed how the
life-style
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had
been
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changed with technology
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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.
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the most curious that "talking with friends" had
a
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increase of 5% between the first survive in 1985 to the
second
survive in 1995,
otherwise
"talking with family" had a great decrease of almost 10% less between
two
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the two
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years. In fact, the
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talking
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about how the
activies
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activities
had been
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changed over the years and how one unique thing could change the way
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people
could
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live their
lifes
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lives
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.
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