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Any country should be able to sell goods to other countries without the restrictions of the government. Do you agree or disagree?

#country #goods #countries #restrictions #government
There is a contentious argument over whether selling
goods
 to other countries should be under certain restrictions or not. I totally agree with
this
 opinion because doing so will have
positive
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 impact on the economy and society. The main reason why I believe that trading with other nations should be restrictionless
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because
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this
 will help the market to have various types of
goods
 and
thus
, stronger buying ability. Another reason why I agree
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 is that
this
 will help
politic
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 relations with the trading countries to become stronger.
For example
, Jordan and Turkey have
open
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 trading agreement
this
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 has helped
the
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goods
to
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enter both nations with ease and no restrictions. Another reason why I support
this
,
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 is that
this
 will help the people to invest in trading agencies that sell these consumables.
In addition
, the taxes on these will be too low and
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result
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, the consumer will not see these
goods
 as expensive as the national products. To illustrate, Turkish products in Jordan are taxed
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 only 2% and
this
 has led to
competitve
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competitive
 prices with high product quality. In conclusion, I completely agree that countries should exchange
goods
 without restrictions, because
this
 will help enhance
politic
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 relations, strengthen the economy, lower product prices, and variety of products in the market.
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