The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned development of the site.
The given maps provide information about the layout of an industrial zone in the
town
of Norbiton in the present,
as well as
planned developments to
this
layout. Generally speaking, the natural area will be
cut-down
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cut down
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in order to construct housing, and a bridge will
also
be built in
favor
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of finding a way to reach housing. Alongside
this
, more facilities will be built around the ring road. In the north of the
town
, the farmland will be replaced in some areas, as housing will be constructed. In order to reach housing, a bridge will be constructed so that individuals can cross the river and visit housing.
Moreover
, in the west of the
town
, the existing housing will be moved from their location because the road will be extended;
also
, near the roundabout, some housing will be converted to shops, and, below the shops, a little roundabout will be built. On the other side of the
town
, there will be a playground, which will be between the river and
housing
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,
while
the housing located
at the end
of the road will be demolished in order to construct a school. In the southeast of the
town
, a medical
center
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will be built next to the roundabout.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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