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Some people believe that because of modern technology, it is no longer necessary for people to learn handwriting skills, while others think that handwriting is still an important skill.

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In the modern era, many argue that in the
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 future, up-to-date technologies can replace traditional writing.
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This
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 the development of AI (artificial intelligence). In today's world, there are programs with modern
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, which
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only
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 a person's voice. To exemplify, it tends to be recorded on a computer's
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 a laptop's screen.
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, it gives an opportunity for cripples and disabled people to be teachers or writers, like used to be Stephen Hawking.
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, there is no shadow of a doubt that
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 writing by hand is an undeniably necessary skill. Classical letters or books, which are
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manuscripts
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, can bring warm feelings
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 the imagination. To exemplify, many of these works are invaluable in comparison with "soulless" documents,
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 as Shakespeare's scripts. Another argument is
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, cutting-edge technology can be simply broken because of a cyberattack or electricity
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being cut off. In conclusion, as it may seem, advances in technology might replace traditional methods of writing.
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,
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 on electricity, it would be better to do both types of preserving information.

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Task Response
Ensure that all arguments and examples directly relate to the topic and question prompt to fully address the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is somewhat unclear in some parts. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas are linked cohesively throughout the essay.
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise and varied word choices. Also, be cautious of the usage of idiomatic expressions and informal language in an academic essay.
Grammatical Range
Pay close attention to sentence structure, verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement. Review complex sentence structures and ensure clarity and accuracy in your grammatical constructions.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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