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You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive at the destination. Write a letter to the post office manager. In your letter, •give details of the situation • describe the documents • say what action you want the post office to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to find out the official paper which I sent
last
 week and have not received yet. I believe you know the exact workers who are working in that area so they transfer the mail as soon as possible.
Firstly
, I went to the post office
last
 Friday to send the important document to Toronto. The staff members told me that it would reach the destination within one week.
Although
, the week is already completed my papers have not reached the preferred location. As you know, the documents are very important as I passed the interview at Mircom Group of Companies and they told me to send the contract form by completing it. By the way, I sent the filling paper on time but it takes so much time at your end.
Moreover
, my joining date is 16th November and it is mandatory to receive the documents before
this
 date.
Furthermore
, the tracking number of
this
 mail is TC496389912. I request you please take immediate action so that the paper will reach its destination within two days.
Therefore
, please ask your staff members to search my official forms and send
it
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them
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 to the target location. Yours faithfully, LS
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear and focused main idea
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and closings to enhance formality in the letter
task achievement
Improve the overall clarity and coherence by organizing ideas more effectively
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Pay attention to the appropriate use of tone and formality throughout the letter

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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