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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 some
individuals
 are of the opinion that
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people
 who are professional should
work
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country
 where they
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this
 opportunity to learn and progress, there are other
people
who
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 they suppose, they should not limit. I am of the opinion that working in
the
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country
 where
people
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 their abilities should be
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one in
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in
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of
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thier
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their
 priorities.
This
 essay attempts to outline
the
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both views. There are some
people
 that they claim that professional
people
such
 as doctors and engineers have
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the
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 right to decide
obout
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about
 the future of their job, particularly the
country
 where they would like to
work
 there.
That is
, they should not be limited. Because, on the one hand, all
people
 must have
right
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 to
get
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decision
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decisions
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obout
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about
 their own life.
On the other hand
,
imegrating
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integrating
this
expertise
people
 to
another
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in another
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country
,
specialy
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especially
specially
 poor countries which have always been deprived
from
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of
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advantages
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the advantages
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 of having some
expertise
, can
improved
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 the quality of
people
's lives all around
world
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the world
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. All in all, there is a
conflict
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 opinion with
this
. On the other side of the
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coin
, many
individuals
 believe that these
expertise
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people
 should
work
 for the
country
where
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that
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 help them to be able in their major.
Due to
 the fact that the amount of money of government went
on
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into
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 increasing their
knowledg
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knowledge
 and abilities by providing facilities and professors in their
school
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schools
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 and
university
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universities
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.
For example
, in Iran, about 100 thousand dollars on average must go on for
every one
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 from its first class to get a
bachelor
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 degree. Another claim of these
individuals
 is that a large number of
people
 are working as a
soldure
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soldier
solder
 to provide a safe situation for those
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people
 to achieve
thier
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their
 qualifications, so they are
responisble
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responsible
about
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for
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 other
people
. In general, some
people
 claim that
individuals
 who they were educated should
free
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be free
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 for the region where they would like to
work
, because they can help poor countries. But, others think that they
had
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have
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 used the facilities of the
country
.
There for
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Therefore
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, they should
work
 for
this
country
 and I agree with these
individuals
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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