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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 are of the opinion that
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people
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 who are professional should
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 their abilities should be
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their
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both views. There are some
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 that they claim that professional
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 as doctors and engineers have
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 right to decide
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about
 the future of their job, particularly the
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 where they would like to
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, they should not be limited. Because, on the one hand, all
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 must have
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decision
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about
 their own life.
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,
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integrating
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expertise
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people
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 to
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in another
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country
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,
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especially
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 poor countries which have always been deprived
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advantages
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the advantages
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 of having some
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, can
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 the quality of
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's lives all around
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. All in all, there is a
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 opinion with
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. On the other side of the
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, many
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 believe that these
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people
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 should
work
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where
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 help them to be able in their major.
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 the fact that the amount of money of government went
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knowledge
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schools
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 and
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universities
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.
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, in Iran, about 100 thousand dollars on average must go on for
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 from its first class to get a
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 degree. Another claim of these
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 is that a large number of
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 are working as a
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soldier
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expertise
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people
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 to achieve
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their
 qualifications, so they are
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responsible
about
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for
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 other
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. In general, some
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 claim that
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 who they were educated should
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 for the region where they would like to
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, because they can help poor countries. But, others think that they
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 used the facilities of the
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.
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, they should
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 for
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country
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 and I agree with these
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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