In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation ?
For some
people
, buying a house
is more crucial instead
of renting them
. Correct pronoun usage
it
Main
reason Add an article
The main
of
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for
this
situation
is their limited knowledge about investment
. From my perspective, it is Correct article usage
a negative
negative
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a negative
situation
because they can Wrong verb form
lose
lost
their home easily and Wrong verb form
lose
also
they can manage their Rephrase
apply
money
in Correct article usage
a more
more
efficient way rather than put all their Correct article usage
a more
money
into the house
.
In some countries, people
are tend
to buy Change the verb form
tend
house
for Fix the agreement mistake
houses
investment
purpose
and Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
also
for earning
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to earn
money
from renting. The world population is rising and demand for the houses
increasing
too, but we have a limited land areas
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a limited land area
limited land areas
in
the earth. Because of these, Change preposition
on
house
prices increasing
regularly which Wrong verb form
increase
put
Wrong verb form
puts
houses
into the asset position as a long term
Add a hyphen
long-term
investment
strategy. Also
, after become
a landlord, Change the verb form
becoming
people
can easily get reveneu
from renting that Correct your spelling
revenue
houses
. Fix the agreement mistake
house
Moreover
, if they buy that facilities
in popular Change the determiner
that facility
those facilities
touristic
places, their income will be Replace the word
tourist
more
. Correct word choice
higher
In addition
to that, when people
buy a home, they are become
a part of the society that Change to the active voice
become
have become
living
in Wrong verb form
lives
area
that their Add an article
an area
the area
house
is located in and in some locations more wealthy people
are living. So, they can have a wealthy neighbour and expand their network with these people
which may affect also
to
their professional life.
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apply
However
, people
can easily lost
their Change the verb form
lose
be lost
houses
with
an earthquake, fire or tsunami and Change preposition
in
this
is not the best option to save their
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apply
money
in
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on
the
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apply
asset
that you may Fix the agreement mistake
assets
lost
in Change the verb form
lose
a
one day. Even, if they have Correct article usage
apply
an
insurance, it will not cover Remove the article
apply
the
all the prices for buying Correct article usage
apply
new
home but in the renting Add an article
a new
situation
, you can move to another house
easily without losing any money
. Furthermore
, last
data show that making Correct article usage
the last
investment
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the investment
an investment
to
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in
the
cryptocurrencies or gold bring more revenue than buying a Correct article usage
apply
house
. In addition
to that, when people
own a place, also
they are responsible for it’s
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its
maintanence
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maintenance
that
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which
add
additional pressure to your economic Correct subject-verb agreement
adds
situation
.
In conclusion, people
have different vision
about Fix the agreement mistake
visions
manage
their Change the verb form
managing
money
and buying house
is one of the Add an article
a house
option
. For me, Change to a plural noun
options
this
is negative
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a negative
situation
because people
have more advance
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advanced
investment
oppurtunity
and Correct your spelling
opportunities
houses
are very risky assets that people
can lost
them with Change the verb form
lose
the
natural disasters.Correct article usage
apply
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