In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation ?

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For some
people
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, buying a
house
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is more crucial
instead
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of renting
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reason
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this
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situation
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is their limited knowledge about
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. From my perspective, it is
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a negative
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negative
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a negative
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situation
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because they can
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lost
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their home easily and
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also
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they can manage their
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in
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a more
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more
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efficient way rather than put all their
money
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into the
house
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. In some countries,
people
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are tend
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to buy
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house
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houses
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for
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purpose
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purposes
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and
also
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for earning
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money
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from renting. The world population is rising and demand for the
houses
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increasing too, but we have
a limited land areas
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in
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the earth. Because of these,
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prices
increasing
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regularly which
put
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puts
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houses
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into the asset position as a
long term
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investment
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strategy.
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, after
become
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a landlord,
people
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can easily get
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revenue
from renting that
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houses
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house
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.
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, if they buy
that facilities
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in popular
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places, their income will be
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higher
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.
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to that, when
people
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buy a home, they
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a part of the society that
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lives
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in
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an area
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that their
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is located in and in some locations more wealthy
people
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are living. So, they can have a wealthy neighbour and expand their network with these
people
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which may affect
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to
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their professional life.
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,
people
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can easily
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their
houses
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with
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an earthquake, fire or tsunami and
this
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is not the best option to save
their
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apply
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money
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in
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on
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the
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apply
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asset
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assets
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that you may
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in
a
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one day. Even, if they have
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insurance, it will not cover
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all the prices for buying
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home but in the renting
situation
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, you can move to another
house
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easily without losing any
money
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.
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,
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last
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data show that making
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investment
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the investment
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to
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the
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cryptocurrencies or gold bring more revenue than buying a
house
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.
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to that, when
people
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own a place,
also
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they are responsible for
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maintanence
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maintenance
that
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add
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additional pressure to your economic
situation
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. In conclusion,
people
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have different
vision
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about
manage
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their
money
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and buying
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house
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a house
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is one of the
option
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. For me,
this
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is
negative
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a negative
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situation
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because
people
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have more
advance
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advanced
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investment
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oppurtunity
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opportunities
and
houses
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are very risky assets that
people
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can
lost
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them with
the
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natural disasters.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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