64.The table below shows the total number of US cruise passengers in 1995 and 2005. The chart shows the percentage of different age groups who bought travel insurance. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the total amount of United States cruise passengers in the
years
1995 and 2005. The bar graph below shows the proportion of different age
ranges that bought travel insurance
in those years
.
Overall
, the number
of passengers increased significantly during the 10 years
. The other significant feature is that the older the passenger, the higher the probability of buying insurance
.
In 1995, the total number
of passengers on the cruise was only 397,837. Where people
in the age
range
18 to 28 and 29 to 39, were the ones that bought the least travel insurance
, with approximately 5% each age
range
. Furthermore
, 10% of people
from 40 to 50 bought insurance
, which is 2% less than those from 51 to 61, while
individuals from 62 to 72 and from 73 to 83 had the highest proportion of people
buying insurance
, with around 28% and 38% respectively.
In the next 10 years
, the total number
of travellers rose sharply, as well as
the number
of individuals buying insurance
, with the total number
of people
was 3.569,251. Moreover
, 10% of people
in the lower age
range
bought insurance
and 12% of those from 29 to 39 years
old, while
20% of individuals from 40 to 50 also
bought it. 25% of people
in the age
range
51 to 61 bought the insurance
, which is half of those from the age
range
73 to 83. Finally
, 35% in the age
range
62 to 72 bought the insurance
in 2005.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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