64.The table below shows the total number of US cruise passengers in 1995 and 2005. The chart shows the percentage of different age groups who bought travel insurance. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

64.The table below shows the total number of US cruise passengers in 1995 and 2005.  The chart shows the percentage of different age groups who bought travel insurance. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the total amount of United States cruise passengers in the
years
1995 and 2005. The bar graph below shows the proportion of different
age
ranges that bought travel
insurance
in those
years
.
Overall
, the
number
of passengers increased significantly during the 10
years
. The other significant feature is that the older the passenger, the higher the probability of buying
insurance
. In 1995, the total
number
of passengers on the cruise was only 397,837. Where
people
in the
age
range
18 to 28 and 29 to 39, were the ones that bought the least travel
insurance
, with approximately 5% each
age
range
.
Furthermore
, 10% of
people
from 40 to 50 bought
insurance
, which is 2% less than those from 51 to 61,
while
individuals from 62 to 72 and from 73 to 83 had the highest proportion of
people
buying
insurance
, with around 28% and 38% respectively. In the next 10
years
, the total
number
of travellers rose sharply,
as well as
the
number
of individuals buying
insurance
, with the total
number
of
people
was 3.569,251.
Moreover
, 10% of
people
in the lower
age
range
bought
insurance
and 12% of those from 29 to 39
years
old,
while
20% of individuals from 40 to 50
also
bought it. 25% of
people
in the
age
range
51 to 61 bought the
insurance
, which is half of those from the
age
range
73 to 83.
Finally
, 35% in the
age
range
62 to 72 bought the
insurance
in 2005.
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