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64.The table below shows the total number of US cruise passengers in 1995 and 2005. The chart shows the percentage of different age groups who bought travel insurance. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

64.The table below shows the total number of US cruise passengers in 1995 and 2005. The chart shows the percentage of different age groups who bought travel insurance. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates the total amount of United States cruise passengers in the
years
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 1995 and 2005. The bar graph below shows the proportion of different
age
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 ranges that bought travel
insurance
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 in those
years
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.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of passengers increased significantly during the 10
years
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. The other significant feature is that the older the passenger, the higher the probability of buying
insurance
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. In 1995, the total
number
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 of passengers on the cruise was only 397,837. Where
people
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 in the
age
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range
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 18 to 28 and 29 to 39, were the ones that bought the least travel
insurance
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, with approximately 5% each
age
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range
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.
Furthermore
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, 10% of
people
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 from 40 to 50 bought
insurance
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, which is 2% less than those from 51 to 61,
while
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 individuals from 62 to 72 and from 73 to 83 had the highest proportion of
people
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 buying
insurance
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, with around 28% and 38% respectively. In the next 10
years
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, the total
number
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 of travellers rose sharply,
as well as
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 the
number
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 of individuals buying
insurance
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, with the total
number
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 of
people
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 was 3.569,251.
Moreover
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, 10% of
people
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 in the lower
age
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range
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 bought
insurance
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 and 12% of those from 29 to 39
years
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 old,
while
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 20% of individuals from 40 to 50
also
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 bought it. 25% of
people
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 in the
age
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range
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 51 to 61 bought the
insurance
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, which is half of those from the
age
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range
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 73 to 83.
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, 35% in the
age
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range
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 62 to 72 bought the
insurance
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 in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, age, insurance, number, people, range with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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