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65.The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

65.The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart illustrates the destination of Anthropology
students
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 after graduating from one university,
while
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 the table shows the salaries of these
students
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 after 5 years of work.
Overall
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, most of the
students
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 found a full-time
job
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,
while
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 there is
also
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 a small
proportion
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 of
people
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 that are studying postgraduate and doing a part-time
job
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.
Also
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,
people
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 working in the government sector, have the highest salaries. More than half of
students
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 found full-time work, specifically, 52%, having the largest
proportion
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. Followed by those who have a part-time
job
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, with only 15% of the
overall
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 share, which is 3% higher than those who are unemployed, with 12%.
Furthermore
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, individuals who are studying postgraduate and have a full-time
job
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, occupy 8% of the total share,
whereas
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 it is the same
proportion
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 of those
students
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 who do not know what they are doing, the
students
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 doing part-time jobs and studying postgraduate, have the lowest
proportion
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, with only 5%. Individuals after working 5 years, 40% of those who work as freelance consultants have a
salary
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 between $75,000- $99,000 and the other 40% have a
salary
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 of $100,000 or more. 5% of
people
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 working in freelance consultants and the government sector have a
salary
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 of $25,000 to $49,999 and 15% of
people
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 working in these sectors have a
salary
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 of $50,000 to $74,999,
while
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 50% of
people
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 who have a
job
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 in the government sector has a
salary
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 of more than $100,000

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, job, proportion, people, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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