Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
There is no denying that violent
crimes
have increased significantly in recent years. Even though people believe that the death
penalty
is not the ideal solution to stop this
violence, the death
penalty
is mandatory in some cases.
Firstly
, Many criminals
commit crimes
without thinking despite their knowledge of punishment, which gives them the courageto
believe that any punishment will not frighten them. Correct your spelling
courage to
Therefore
, they must fear death
so that the criminal will think before committing his crime. Many countries impose the death
penalty
for example
, Saudi Arabia, which imposes the death
penalty
on perpetrators of murder and rape. Therefore
, the crime rate in Saudi Arabia is low compared to other countries. The death
penalty
is intended to serve as a severe warning to those who intend to commit similar crimes
, reducing the likelihood of such
crimes
being repeated in the future. For example
, criminals
who make headlines for crimes
like treasure, massacres, drug trafficking, etc. will serve as an example to deter other citizens. committing the same crimes
. Secondly
, a decrease in the number of criminals
will increase community safety, leading to a safer society where people can fully develop intellectually and personally.
In conclusion, any society that wants to reduce crime rates and make its environment safer must apply the death
penalty
to criminals
who deserve it. Making the community a safe place will also
lead to greater gains in the long run.Submitted by sesjej1330 on
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