The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries in cites from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries in cites from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.
The diagram illustrates the percentage of total urban occupants in four different countries namely;
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
, and
Indonesia
from 1970 to 2020,
also
predicts the population each
countary
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country
will have, from 2020 to 2040.
Overall
, the number of people who live in cities for all mentioned countries increased,
also
,
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the figure
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predicts that
this
increasing trend will continue up
to
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year
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2040. In 1970,
Indonesia
had the least city dwellers which
was
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were
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roughly 15
percent
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per cent
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,
while
,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Malaysia
had the highest which was nearly 30
percent
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. It is predicted that by the year 2040, the percentage of people who will live in cities of
Malaysia
will be the highest among all,
additionally
,
this
statistics
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statistic
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will be the least for
Thailand
. In
year
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2020, the total city inhabitants are reported 30%, 45%, 50%, and over 80% for
Thailand
, Philippines,
Indonesia
, and
Malaysia
respectively. The
trend
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of
Indonesia
,
Thailand
, and
Malaysia
have almost any fluctuation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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