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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the percentages of five different industries in Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019,
along with
 the estimated measures for 2029.
Overall
, it is evident that the
finance
 sector, the most lucrative by 2019, is still projected to be the backbone of
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econonmy
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economy
 in 2029.
By contrast
, food processing and manufacturing are expected to remain
as
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the two least profitable in the future. In 2009, the
share
 of
finance
 was just above 30%, the highest among the five categories, followed by 26% of tourism and
natrual
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natural
 resources (oil, coal and gas) for each. After ten years, the
share
 of
finance
 and energy sources rose to 36% and 31%, respectively. Meanwhile, the figure for tourism fell to around 20%. In the case of food processing, the sector saw a significant upsurge, doubling to 20% across the same period,
while
 the
share
 of
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 business
redcued
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reduced
 from 20% to 15% in 2019.
Forseeing
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Foreseeing
 the future of the
economy
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 landscape, the ever-increasing pattern of
finance
 is anticipated to continue to grow, with its 2029 estimated
share
 of just above 40%. The other two major industries are
forcasted
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forecasted
 to be the natural resources and travel industry, with their shares of 30% and 20%, respectively.
Conversely
,
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the food
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food
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the food
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 processing and
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manufacturing
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manufacture
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manufacturing
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businesses
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business
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businesses
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is
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are
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 predicted to experience a massive decline, plummeting to 10% and 5% in 2029, respectively.
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