Every one of us should become a vegeterian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
in the modern world consider their meal pattern than before
due to
they want to
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take
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balance
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diet,
it
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will help
to
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them to
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have a healthy life. So, all of us want to be
vegiterian
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vegetarian
due to
meat
will be a
cause
to
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health
issues. I
totaly
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totally
disagree with
this
statement and in
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I will
eleminate
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eliminate
the major reasons for that. Mainly, we want to learn what kind of
neutritions
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nutrition
nutritions
contain
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contained
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the
meat
this
will help us to decide our eating
habit
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. Most
of
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the
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red
meat
contains proteins and fish contains calcium. If we avoid
this
meat
it will
be
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a
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cuase
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cause
case
to unbalance
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meal
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and more
health
issues.
For example
, most
of
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the
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people
trend
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tend
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to consume junk food
such
as pasta,
buns
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and buns
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with
lot
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of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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but you can replace
this carbohydrate
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these carbohydrates
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with
meats
and it will not
effect
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your taste and nutrition levels. Most of
dietetions
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dietetics
dietitians
advice to take more
protiens
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proteins
.
However
, most of the protein contains in
meats
so we can not avoid
meats
and it will prevent
from
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a lot of
health
problems
such
as blood sugar and
cholestrol
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cholesterol
.
On the other hand
, some
meat
products
not
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healthy,
those
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products
cause
to
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serious
health
problems
such
as cancer and cholesterol.
Specially
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, most
of
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the
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children are addicted to
have
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junk food like
,
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hot dogs. These kinds of unhealthy
meat
habits will be more dangerous in the future. In conclusion, eating
meat
is not a
cause
to
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health
issues but the way we eat
meat
will
effect
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affect
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for
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health
such
as
process
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meat
and sausages.
Therefore
we want to avoid those
type
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types
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of
meat
but not other
meats
.
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Because
meats
contains
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a lot of benefits to our
health
. But some
people
have their personal
beleifs
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beliefs
about eating
meat
, those
people
try to be vegetarian. So, I do not agree everyone
want
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to be
vegeterian
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vegetarian
due to
having
meat
cause
to physical
health
.
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