Every one of us should become a vegeterian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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people
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they want to a
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have a
take
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apply
balance
diet, Correct your spelling
balanced
it
will help Correct pronoun usage
which
to
have a healthy life. So, all of us want to be Correct pronoun usage
them to
vegiterian
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vegetarian
due to
meat
will be a cause
to
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of
health
issues. I totaly
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totally
this
statement and in this
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the major reasons for that.
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eliminate
neutritions
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nutrition
nutritions
contain
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contained
meat
this
will help us to decide our eating habit
. Most Fix the agreement mistake
habits
of
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apply
the
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apply
meat
contains proteins and fish contains calcium. If we avoid this
meat
it will be
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apply
a
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apply
cuase
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cause
case
to unbalance
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unbalanced
meal
and more Fix the agreement mistake
meals
health
issues. For example
, most of
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apply
the
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apply
people
trend
to consume junk food Correct your spelling
tend
such
as pasta, buns
with Correct word choice
and buns
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a lot
carbohydrate
but you can replace Change to a plural noun
carbohydrates
this carbohydrate
with Fix the agreement mistake
these carbohydrates
meats
and it will not effect
your taste and nutrition levels. Most of Correct your spelling
affect
dietetions
advice to take more Correct your spelling
dietetics
dietitians
protiens
. Correct your spelling
proteins
However
, most of the protein contains in meats
so we can not avoid meats
and it will prevent from
a lot of Change preposition
apply
health
problems such
as blood sugar and cholestrol
.
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cholesterol
On the other hand
, some meat
products not
healthy, Add a missing verb
are not
those
products Correct word choice
and those
cause
to
serious Change preposition
apply
health
problems such
as cancer and cholesterol. Specially
, most Rephrase
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of
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apply
the
children are addicted to Correct article usage
apply
have
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apply
,
hot dogs. These kinds of unhealthy Remove the comma
apply
meat
habits will be more dangerous in the future.
In conclusion, eating meat
is not a cause
to
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of
health
issues but the way we eat meat
will effect
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affect
for
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apply
health
such
as process
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processed
meat
and sausages. Therefore
we want to avoid those type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
meat
but not other meats
. Becasue
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Because
meats
contains
a lot of benefits to our Change the verb form
contain
health
. But some people
have their personal beleifs
about eating Correct your spelling
beliefs
meat
, those people
try to be vegetarian. So, I do not agree everyone want
to be Change the verb form
wants
vegeterian
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vegetarian
due to
having meat
cause
to physical health
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