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What are advantages and disadvantage of use social media? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the modern
era
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 social networking sites have become an essential part of everyday
life
. There are those who say that interactive media has enhanced our lives in various ways,
while
 others feel that we are worse off because of the issue. In
this
essay
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 I will examine the positive aspects and drawbacks of public social networking and provide my
overall
 opinion. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why
people
 believe that social communication is convenient
to communicate
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for communicating
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to
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with
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 friends, family and relatives who are staying away from us or outside of
own
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our own
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 country. A good illustration of
this
 is that
people
 who are attending
in
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overseas study
he
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or
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she
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can communicate easily through interactive media
such
 as
Face Book
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FaceBook
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, Twitter,
and
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WhatsApp etc. A
further
 point in favor application of social media someone can start a business within
shortest
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time
and
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to reach out a large group of
people
 and provide customized information
to
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apply
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as per customer requirements.
For instance
, if you want to start Apple’s products
sell
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selling
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 on
the
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social networking sites you may reach your target customers and
customized
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customise
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 locations with trustworthy specifications. Despite these arguments, many
people
 feel that social networking
have
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has
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 drawbacks for a few reasons. The main reason why
people
 think that
this
 is
a
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harmful
because
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is because
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 it has some negative
affect
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effect
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for
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on
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 our own health like sleep issues, less
vison
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vision
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 of
eye
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the eye
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, and brain cancer.
Secondly
, spending
time
 on public networking is a waste of
time
due to
 impacting our social
life
as well as
 family
time
.
For example
, after coming back from work we should spend laser
time
 with our family but during
this
time
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group
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groups
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 of
people
using
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use
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 public networking which
is impacting
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impacts
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 our personal relations. In conclusion, it must be said that social networking
site
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sites
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 have pros and cons, we should
be
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 used as per requirement which won’t be able to impact our personal
life
. Having considered both
side
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sides
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 of the issue, I would say public networking is an essential need in our day-to-day
life
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lives
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. If we use it as per need we will get full benefit in our whole society.
Submitted by polash.kahari on

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task response
The essay does not fully address the prompt. The advantages and disadvantages of social media are discussed, but the response lacks depth and relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The logical structure is somewhat confusing, and the points are not well-connected.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and lacks precision in expression. Some sentences are unclear and require improvement.
grammatical range
There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement, article usage, and word choice. The sentence structures could be more varied and complex to demonstrate a better command of English.
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