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Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school or at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do, or do you feel children have enough education at school?

#parents #organise #classes #children #school #weekends #education
One of the widely discussed issues
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nowadays is school education, particularly, some parents make additional classes after school and at the weekends for their
children
. How does it impacts on educational
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achievement
? And how does it
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young
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 organism in general? It is undeniable that extra education for
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school years
children
 has become an essential part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some people find
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 beneficial,
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 others consider it negatively. Surely, there are both pros and cons, but I tend to think that
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outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantages. One of the main positives of the extra classes is that additional knowledge which
children
 learn from additional lessons is increasing of
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competitive
 skills in the future. Clearly,
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highly educated young men or women more easily find a good job, in
comperison
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comparison
 with the less educated competitors. Another advantage is that
children
 spend less
time
 on the street.
Definetily
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, the teenagers that waste
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 of their
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 of negative impacts,
such
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.
On the other hand
, overloading
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the additional lessons and lack of
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rest
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 to mental health diseases,
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stress and
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depression. In conclusion, taking everything that I mentioned above my standpoint is that extra classes that
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 parents organize for their kids
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 obviously good investments for the future,
however
 parents
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should
could
 not forget that their
children
also
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 to have
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time
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rest and play. Because playing is
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 part of education as well.
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