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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest a lternative days and times for practice You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Miss Merry, I am Akanksha, I am one who is using your community hall for the music practice.
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 am writing
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 of
music
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the music
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. Our band group is not harming
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anyone.
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 is teaching
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students awareness and how to get peace of mind. it's our art culture that we want to give to the next generation. and
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 for the best music, we received a lot of
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. so many countries are appreciating what we are doing. If it's not possible to meet on Tuesday and Friday please allow us
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another day and time of the week we will do our practice
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 that. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon Yours faithfully, Akanksha
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Task Response
The letter does not fully respond to the task prompt and lacks the necessary detail and explanation for certain points. Ensure that each part of the task prompt is addressed clearly and thoroughly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is somewhat disorganized, leading to unclear connections between ideas and paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and should be logically connected to the next.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary and expressions used in the letter are basic and lack variety. The writer should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary and more sophisticated expressions to convey ideas effectively.
Grammatical Range
The letter contains numerous grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. Focus on improving sentence structure and eliminating basic grammatical errors.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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