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Writing Samples
Band 3

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have heard that one of your friends will be doing voluntary work at a festival. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •ask about what type of festival your friend is volunteering at and when and where it will take place •ask what your friend will have to do as part of the voluntary work • ask if the organisers are still looking for more volunteers and how you can apply for the work You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Pat,

Dear steven, I am writing
this
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 letter to know more about
your
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the
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 voluntary
work
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 that you are going to in the festival. You are doing great
work
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 to help people. but
actully
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actually
on
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at
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 which festival you are going to do
volutary
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voluntary
work
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 and is it near
from
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apply
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your place and when it is going to
happend
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happen
. nowadays I am
also
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 feeling to do some social activities.
Howevre
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However
, can I
also
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participet
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participate
? As a voluntary, if your organisers are still looking for more volunteers please suggest my name. as I have
lot
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a lot
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 of time I can actively come. I got very much inspired by your
work
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, tell
to
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apply
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your organisation that consider my profile.
wating
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Waiting
 for your reply. looking forward to hearing from you. yours faithfully, Akanksha

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task response
The letter does not fully respond to the prompt. It lacks important details about the festival, the type of work, and how to apply for volunteer work.
coherence cohesion
The letter lacks coherence and cohesion as it jumps from one topic to another without proper organization. In addition, the greeting and closing need improvement for a formal letter.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is limited and includes informal language. It is important to use appropriate vocabulary, especially in a formal letter.
grammatical range
The grammatical range is limited, and there are several errors in sentence structure and word usage. It is important to improve grammar for clarity and formality.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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