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Many research found that some food and drink products containing bad substance for human, therefore it must be banned from the market. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is being said by researchers that specific
food
 and drink
products
 contain bad substances for humans,
therefore
 they must be banned from the market. I agree with the statement as it is crucial to provide the best
food
 quality for everyone.
Firstly
, gastronomical
products
 should be tested to protect consumers from unnecessary gain weight or chronic illnesses.
For instance
, it is widely known that the United States has one of the worst range of foods in supermarkets. Its lack of nutritional value is the reason why the obesity issue is enormous
as well as
 many cardiac arrests.
This
 shows why most of the
products
, snacks etc. are banned in Europe.
Moreover
, many
food
 companies are hiding actual ingredients that are being put into people's
food
. It is no surprise that human who does not know about it is going to face vast health problems which even can lead to death. The numerous court cases show that there can not be any faith or trust in the
food
 business as we only know one side of the coin. It only supports the opinion that
such
products
 can not be sold to the public.
To conclude
 , any
vivers
Correct your spelling
viewers
divers
videos
 containing unwholesome substances must be banned. Various situations have shown that it has never had a good impact on anyone's health or immune system. In my opinion,
such
 foods and drinks should never be consumed by anyone,
therefore
 there has to be a wider range of less processed
products
.
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Address the question directly and provide a clear opinion at the beginning of the essay.
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The logical structure is mostly coherent, but some ideas need to be connected more effectively for better flow.
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Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas and avoid repetition of words or phrases.
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Pay attention to sentence structure and use a variety of grammatical structures. Also, avoid errors in subject-verb agreement.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • safety regulations
  • chronic diseases
  • consumer awareness
  • health-conscious
  • healthcare systems
  • diet-related conditions
  • economic implications
  • ethical considerations
  • moral responsibility
  • government regulation
  • food and beverage companies
  • innovate
  • safer
  • healthier alternatives
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