The bar chart below shows the percentage of Austaralian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates how many Australian men and women had done physical activity regularly based on different age
groups
in 2010.
Overall
, the rate of females doing physical activities at that moment was much higher than that of males. However
, the highest rate was done by males.
Looking into details, youthful females aged from 25 to 64 tended to do physical exercise much more intensely with half of the percentage, while
the figure for males did less, just under 45%. However
, the figure for groups
over 65 both men and women, had approximately the same proportion of exercising movement physically, about 46.7 % and 47.1% respectively.
In contrast
, even though females dominated boys in doing physical activity on average, there was a significantly different ratio of Australians aged 15 to 24 groups
. The figure for males’ scale exceeded the boys’ rate by almost 5%, between 52.8% and 47.7%. It also
was the highest proportion among the Australian aged groups
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