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Many people think that to become a successful specialist and never change it later . Agree or disagree ?

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People have divergent opinions about
become
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becoming
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 a prosperous specialist preferable to select a vacation in early
life
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 and
don't
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not
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 alter it later .
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, I
beleive
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believe
 it's a controversial objective and I will explain
in
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it in
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this
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 essay . Undeniably,
for
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apply
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those who
in
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an
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 advance decision to select a profession can achieve their goals easily . Obviously , it is a long
time
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 process so it would be better to think about it early stage that can help individuals to
great
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apply
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determine their walks of
life
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 .
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, someone who wants to be a doctor in future for
this
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 they have to prepare for
in
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this
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time
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 . They have
settle
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settled
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 up to relate
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 subject in study and
also
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 ready up mentally and make more determination of advancements can help the individuals to set a goal to achieve and become more energetic
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 lead to a positive impact on
life
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 .
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 way does not
works
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work
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 it
vary
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varies
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 in the situation . After a certain period of
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time
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 it might be
change
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changed
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 or someone can not afford to continue .
Another reasons
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 would be after a
time
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 their mind would
be divert
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be diverted
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thus
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lead
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leading
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 to
make
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making
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 an alternative profession .
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 , anyone who wants
government
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a government
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 job in future but
some times
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sometimes
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they
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apply
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get more opportunities better than
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this occupations
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this occupation
these occupations
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such
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 as individuals
get
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who get
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 a chance to go abroad for higher study
this
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time
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 they switch
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on
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an
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 alternative or after a
while
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 they can't afford
cost
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the cost
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 or may be unable to bear fretted pressure .
As well
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, after a certain
age
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age,
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 they like another profession that able to lead
luxurious
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a luxurious
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life
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 . In conclusion . Though early preparation for
job
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a job
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 is effective and gives a lot of benefits to achieve a
desire
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desired
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 goals
but
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apply
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sometime
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sometimes
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 does not work because of so many
situation
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 and
also
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 divert their mind after a
while
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The main points are not well-supported and the essay lacks coherence and cohesion.
task response
The essay partially responds to the task. It lacks clear and comprehensive ideas along with relevant specific examples.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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