Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. what might have caused this situation? How to improve it?

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Anti social
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Anti-social
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behaviour can be considered
such
kinds of crime
such
as stealing, physical attack or
non criminal
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non-criminal
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behaviour
such
as lying and manipulation.
Also
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it can be seen the lack of respect for others. These
problems
becoming increasingly serious in many nations.
Although
these activities
threatens
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many societies. Their
effects
can
also
be combated successfully.
This
essay looks at some of the
problems
caused by antisocial activities and
suggest
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some solutions to the
problems
. Anti-social activities
causes
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multiple
problems
. The detrimental
effects
are very obvious.
For example
, physical attack in some cases,
such
as even leads to death. The second effect is stealing
somethings
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some things
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from
others
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other
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people, it has
also
a huge impact on
the
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apply
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society
.
However
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the
menece
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menace
of antisocial behaviour in
society
can be fought. Education is the main way to tackle
this
issues
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issue
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. People need to be aware of the
effects
so that they can avoid
this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
.
In addition
, the government could
also
take some
step
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steps
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related to
working
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a working
the working
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hour
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hours
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of a person so that
society
can give more time to children to
learn
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teach
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them moral
value
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values
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.
Although
the problem is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term there are concrete steps to reduce the
effects
it is having on the current
society
.
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