Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. what might have caused this situation? How to improve it?

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Anti social

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behaviour can be considered

such

kinds of crime

such

as stealing, physical attack or

non criminal

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non-criminal

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behaviour

such

as lying and manipulation.

Also

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it can be seen the lack of respect for others. These

problems

becoming increasingly serious in many nations.

Although

these activities

threatens

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many societies. Their

effects

can

also

be combated successfully.

This

essay looks at some of the

problems

caused by antisocial activities and

suggest

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some solutions to the

problems

. Anti-social activities

causes

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multiple

problems

. The detrimental

effects

are very obvious.

For example

, physical attack in some cases,

such

as even leads to death. The second effect is stealing

somethings

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some things

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from

others

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people, it has

also

a huge impact on

the

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apply

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society

However

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the

menece

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menace

of antisocial behaviour in

society

can be fought. Education is the main way to tackle

this

issues

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issue

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. People need to be aware of the

effects

so that they can avoid

this

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this problem

these problems

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problems

In addition

, the government could

also

take some

step

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steps

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related to

working

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a working

the working

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hour

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hours

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of a person so that

society

can give more time to children to

learn

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teach

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them moral

value

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values

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Although

the problem is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term there are concrete steps to reduce the

effects

it is having on the current

society

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coherence and cohesion

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3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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