Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. what might have caused this situation? How to improve it?

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Anti social

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behaviour can be considered

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kinds of crime

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as stealing, physical attack or

non criminal

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non-criminal

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behaviour

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as lying and manipulation.

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Also

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it can be seen the lack of respect for others. These

problems

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becoming increasingly serious in many nations.

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these activities

threatens

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many societies. Their

effects

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can

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be combated successfully.

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essay looks at some of the

problems

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caused by antisocial activities and

suggest

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some solutions to the

problems

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. Anti-social activities

causes

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multiple

problems

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. The detrimental

effects

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are very obvious.

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, physical attack in some cases,

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as even leads to death. The second effect is stealing

somethings

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some things

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from

others

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people, it has

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a huge impact on

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apply

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society

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However

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the

menece

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menace

of antisocial behaviour in

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can be fought. Education is the main way to tackle

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issues

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issue

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. People need to be aware of the

effects

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so that they can avoid

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this

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this problem

these problems

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problems

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, the government could

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take some

step

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steps

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related to

working

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a working

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hour

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hours

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of a person so that

society

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can give more time to children to

learn

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teach

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them moral

value

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values

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the problem is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term there are concrete steps to reduce the

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it is having on the current

society

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task response

The essay does not fully address the prompt, and the ideas lack development and relevant examples. The introduction and conclusion need to be more comprehensive.

coherence and cohesion

The logical structure of the essay is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices, and the development of the main points is unclear.

lexical resource

The lexical resource is limited, and there is repetition of vocabulary. The essay lacks specificity, and there is a lack of variety in sentence structures.

grammatical range

The grammatical range is limited, with errors in verb usage, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. More complex sentence structures and grammatical accuracy are needed.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

210 words

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Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. what might have caused this situation? How to improve it?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's world, it is private companies rather than government who pay for and carry out most on scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that shops should sell food products that are made in the local area whenever possible rather than foods that are imported from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that it is the resposibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Diacuss both views and give your opinion.