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Education should be free to all people and should be paid for and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #people #government
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In
this
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 globalized world, the
Government
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 always thinks about all classes of
learners
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 in his/her country, and authority must take action to free education of all
learners
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.
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, to do
this
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,
Government
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 should play a significant role. Though it has some disadvantages, I agree with
this
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 statement. On the one hand, the
Government
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 must manage money to free the educational
fees
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 to all
students
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. If the administration does so, they will be treated as equals, and there will not be any discrimination between poor and wealthy
learners
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.
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, in 2010 in Bangladesh, a few wealthy
students
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 were fighting with poor
students
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, and they said you are poor, and we are rich. You may go to other schools where poor
students
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 are studying. So, the
Government
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 should take
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 issue as soon as possible to avoid
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 types of problems.
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, if pupils do not need to pay educational
fees
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 and the
Government
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 handles it, poor
students
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 can get an advantage and can continue their
studies
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. As a lot of
learners
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 come from incredibly lower-income families, paying
fees
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, it’s tough for their families. Without participating in these poor background
students
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, the country will not improve. So, the
Government
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 should be concerned about how to continue feeless education for all.
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, the most crucial part is that when
students
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 do not pay attention to their educational
fees
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, they can concentrate on their
studies
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 more. When
students
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 come from poorer backgrounds, they think about their institutional
fees
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,
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 they are searching for part part-time jobs and getting involved there.
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, they can not pay too much attention to their
studies
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. So education should be free for all
students
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.
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, when the authority pays all of the institutional tuition
fees
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,
students
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 for all of the classes can gain benefits. They need not think about money;
as a result
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, they can be more attentive to their
studies
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, and they will be the future and can serve the nation.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socioeconomic background
  • meritocracy
  • social equity
  • highly-skilled workforce
  • economic growth
  • financial strain
  • budget allocation
  • overcrowded classrooms
  • educational materials
  • specialized fields
  • tuition costs
  • oversaturation
  • degree holders
  • job opportunities
  • graduate unemployment
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