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The plans below show the site of the airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year

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The map illustrates the current layout of the Southwest
airport
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Airport
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 and the development it will undergo in the upcoming year
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, the site of the airport is predicted to be significantly improved, adding several gates, a bag drop point,
transportation
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and transportation
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 services. Entering through the single departure entrance, there is the check-in point on the left,
while
at
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on
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 the opposite
side
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side,
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 a stop can be made
Cafè
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at Cafè
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 .
Next,
before entering the walkway that permits you to move around the 8 gates available, people will go through the security
passport
control
.
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,
at
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on
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 the right
side
 of the airport, which is dedicated to
the
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apply
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arrivals, there is nothing else but the
passport
control
 customs,
just
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apply
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followed by a dedicated to the arrival exit. Notably, the plan for the redevelopment of the site is much more equipped with services than it is now. The first change appears immediately at
entrance
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the entrance
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 area, where a second door will be added.
Next,
it can be seen that the Cafè will be relocated
at
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to
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 the east
side
 of the entrance, and replaced by the
check- in
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check-in
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 point, moved from the left to the right to make space for a bag drop service. Just after the security
passport
control
, some shops will be added in the area preceding the new sky train that will make passengers arrive
to
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at
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 one of the now 18 gates. As in the current location, there will still be the
passport
control
custom
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customs
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 but in the area before the
now
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new
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 two exits there will be, on the left
side
, a cafe, an ATM and a car hire service.
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