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The bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food export markets for last year and six years ago. summarise information and report main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food export markets for last year and six years ago. summarise information and report main features, make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below compares the top ten international markets for US
processesed
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processed
processes
 food
export
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exports
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, showing figures from
last
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 year and six years ago.
Overall
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, Canada was the leading export destination for both years,
while
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 all countries saw an increase in imports of US
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processed
 food over the
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six-year
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 period. The most significant growth was observed in China and
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the "Rest
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 of the world" category. Canada remained the top importer rising from 9.3
billion
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 six years ago to to 12.3
billion
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last
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 year. The European Union and Mexico follow, showing
a
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apply
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considerable growth,
reacing
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reaching
 4.4
billion
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 and 6.1
billion
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, respectively. The most dramatic increase is seen with China almost tripling from 0.8b to 2.1b. Similar upward trends can be noted in Japan,Australia,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Hong Kong. Japan showed only a slight rise from 2.4b to 2.5b.
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The "Rest
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 of the World" category
also
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 experienced a substantial increase, from 6.3
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 to 11.0
billion
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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