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The chart below gives information about Southand's main exports in 2000, 2020, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southand's main exports in 2000, 2020, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #southand #exports #future #projections #summarise #features #comparisons
the chart
depict
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the
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information about the amount of future
export
 prediction from
southern
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the southern
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 area over a two and half decade between 2000 to 2025 after analyzing the graph it is clearly seen that international
tourism
 and dairy
product
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products
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 showed a significant figure in the year
of
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2025 attracting
to
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almost 9 billion
euro
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euros
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while
 meat
products
 went on declining to
its
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their
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 lowest point in the same year having almost
5billion
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5 billion
in contrast
, the
export
 of
products
 have highest ratio in total followed by int.
tourism
 collecting almost 10billion and 9billion in total of exports and
then
 rock bottom to its
last
 point in the year of 2020
furthermore
,
the
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tourism
export
 got the highest number of selling hitting 8billion
of
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total
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the total
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 but
then
 it gradually
decrease
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decreased
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 to nearly 7 billion
of
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for
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 dairy
products
 after that
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it
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in
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it
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 went on increasing downward and
stops
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stopped
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 there getting almost 6 billion
of
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in
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export
 of meat
products
overall
, it can be vividly seen that
the
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international
tourism
 and
dairy's
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dairy
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products
 showed an inclined trend whilst
that
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of
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meat
products
show declined
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showed a declining
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 trend
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, tourism, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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