A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays there is a tendency to determine the value of an individual by the social and
economical
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status
of the person. I believe that it should be
asessed
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assessed
based on
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personal qualities and
values
. In
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essay, I will explain my views with
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relevant
examples. Personal
qualites
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qualities
and
values
are important to consider
while
assessing a person rather
that
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than
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the material he
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or social
status
. There are
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people
who
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high social
status
and wealth, but
commited
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commit
crimes and anti-social
activites
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activities
.
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, a famous film actor from
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Hollywood has
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by police for abuse of children.
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,
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personal
values
are driving
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the
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society. Despite
the
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social and
economical
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status
, people
are considering
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the
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personal
values
for political selections.
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • judged
  • old-fashioned values
  • perception
  • worthiness
  • external indicators
  • internal qualities
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