Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree

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young children can be badly affected by too much

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spent on the computer daily.

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is partly because sitting in front of a screen for a long period of

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can damage both the eyes and physical posture of the kids, regardless of what they are using the laptop for. It is my opinion that

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young people’s eyes are easily damaged by looking at the screen for a long period of

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. Kids tend to use most of their

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playing electronic games that are often intense and

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time consuming

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research shows that 90% of children around the world spend most of their

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playing virtual games in different places. In as much as some people argue that it is the new technology, I find

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invalid and

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with

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line of thinking will affect our

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and will lead them to too much exposure.

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strongly believe that

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can cause harm to

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young kids.

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, the physical

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of the boys and girls are likely to be destroyed. Sitting on a

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can cause back, neck and shoulder pains.

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, children tend to forget to eat

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concentrating on a laptop which may lead to many hours spent on one position. In as much as some people think that it is a new way of learning and studying

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find

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illogical for little ones to spend much

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on desktops. I am of the opinion that they should

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schedule on when they can use the computers.

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powerfully

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think that computers

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some drawbacks on

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eyes and physical postures.