Tak 1 The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The two plans

illutrate

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illustrate

that

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apply

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the proposed renovation of the university's

sport

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sports

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centre.

Overall

, the outdoor court

have

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been completely demolished.

Gym

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The gym

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will undergo the exoansion

while

pool

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the pool

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, seating , changing room and reception stay in the same location. Two dance studios and changing rooms will be established in future.

Further

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lesure

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leisure

pool

and sports hall will be added as new facilities. Currently, there are two

iutdoor

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outdoor

courts which are located right and left

side

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of the 25m

pool

. The

entrabce

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entrance

face towards the reception which has located south

coner

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corner

of the

pool

. A single changing room and

seatings

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seating

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are located facing towards the

swimmimg

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swimming

pool

According to

the proposal, only the 25m

pool

seating and

changing

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the changing

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room will remain

unchange

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unchanged

. The most significant development will be the establishment of

leisure

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a leisure

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pool

, sport hall and dance studios. The gym will

be undergo

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further

expansion.

Sport

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A sports

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shop and cafe will be added beside the entrance

while

reception at the original location. New changing rooms will be built

south west

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southwest

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and

south east

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southeast

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coners

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corners

corner

of the complex.

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task response

Answer the essay question more comprehensively. Include detailed comparisons of the before and after plans and focus on the main features of the renovation.

coherence cohesion

The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Additionally, the organization of information could be improved for better coherence and flow.

lexical resource

The vocabulary used is adequate, but some technical terms related to sports facilities and renovation could be included for better lexical resource.

grammatical range

There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing throughout the essay. Work on sentence structure, verb tenses, and punctuation for better grammatical range.

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

175 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Tak 1 The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Fully explain your ideas

The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say history is one of the most important school subject. other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?