QUESTION: Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
languages
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in some countries
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not been used anymore by people. Some of us think that it is not too important, because they must not speak with those
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anymore. In
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, others think it is something that we have to concern about. In my view, the disappeared
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to be our concern because
language
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is a communication between us and our past. It is reasonable because
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language
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is our way
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of understanding
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what
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life talked
us
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about in the past.
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as, as
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Indonesian
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Indonesians
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, we can fully understand
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what was happening 70 years ago when Indonesia
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occupied by
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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through the
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that
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used
in
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that time.
Secondly
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, the
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is the best way to understand people.
Misscommunication
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Miscommunication
is happening because of the
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missunderstanding
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misunderstanding
. And the worst
missunderstanding
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misunderstanding
is when we do not understand what the people meant a long time ago.
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, we do not know the condition of our own country better just because we do not
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the
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used before.
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keeping our
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life
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alive
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is one way to make our country be rich with cultures. In conclusion, I think it is really
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necessary
to keep our national
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life
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alive
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
The lexical resource and vocabulary choice are adequate, but there is room for improvement in using a wider range of vocabulary and academic language. Additionally, providing more varied and precise vocabulary can strengthen the overall lexical resource of the essay.
grammatical range
While the essay demonstrates a basic control of grammar, there are several instances of grammatical errors, including verb tenses, agreement, and sentence structure. Further practice is needed to improve the grammatical range and accuracy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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